مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : love
when I need you baby you leave me and you let me alone baby why ? maybe I’m not modern maybe i don't know how to love but , I know one thing , I love you more more more than my self my life baby I’m not romeo or mark Antonio’s , but I’m human i have feeling yes i have feeling .believe me when I saw you athirst time couldn’t believe . I met you. Baby I have waited you from past before all love story in this world .every day you visit me in my dreams you are the princesses of my dreams . baby maybe I’m not the best but also I’m not the worst always I try to become good but some times I fall in holes . These holes learn me how to be knight and strange man baby you only who i loved her and you made me how to work and arrive to what I hope baby I can't live without you if you leave I will back to dark life and die sure I will die. Baby my last word let me as you like but remember no one will love you like me be sure that I know goodbye see you in another life
أم حُسين
25-07-02, 07:55 AM
Well, there are lots of mistakes both grammatically and in vocabulary. Try to avoid repetition and focus on what you really want the reader to feel Also try to think in English not in Arabic coz it's quite tough to translate word-to-word into another كلمة ممنوعةكلمة ممنوعةكلمة ممنوعةكلمة ممنوعةكلمة ممنوعةكلمة ممنوعةكلمة ممنوعةكلمة ممنوعة . Certain phrases lose their flavor in that transaction. If you want me to fully elaborate in my criticism , I can send you a special message. Just tell me so but please don't mistake this for any kind of discouragement. I meant well. One can always learn from one's mistakes:)
شوفي عزيزتي انا مانكر اني محتاجه الى دعم اكثر
لذلك باكون شاكره الك لو انك صححتي الغلاط الا عندي حتى لااطيح فيها مره ثانيه ومن ناحية اني اذا جيت اكتب خاطره انا مانكر اترجمها حرفيا الى الانجليزيه لذلك رحم الله والديش ساعديني اذا في امكانيه
زين ابله ريمي
aquarius
19-08-02, 07:41 AM
الأخ الكريم حذفت مشاركتك الرجاء عدم طرح أغاني في المنتدى و السلام
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