[أم حُسين]

Well, there are lots of mistakes both grammatically and in vocabulary. Try to avoid repetition and focus on what you really want the reader to feel Also try to think in English not in Arabic coz it's quite tough to translate word-to-word into another كلمة ممنوعةكلمة ممنوعةكلمة ممنوعةكلمة ممنوعةكلمة ممنوعةكلمة ممنوعةكلمة ممنوعةكلمة ممنوعة . Certain phrases lose their flavor in that transaction. If you want me to fully elaborate in my criticism , I can send you a special message. Just tell me so but please don't mistake this for any kind of discouragement. I meant well. One can always learn from one's mistakes:)